Posted by giveawayboy on August 14, 2005 at 13:34:15:
In Reply to: Re: Can I Get Your Opinions posted by cav on August 14, 2005 at 09:49:47:
I agree w John. Write more, share more!
: I thought it was good. The subject is not something revolutionary, which is nice, not attempting shock like so many poets. The rhythm is great. You definitely have a great command of the English language, again something rather rare. And it approaches the slightly taboo Christian eroticism. It doesn't need to be taboo, but we just don't often openly express our sexuality in a Christian context. While not as explicit as some I've seen it definitely conveys the emotion...a deep love and respect in the context of an eternal relationship. Good stuff. Write more. Share more.
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: : A few months back I use to go to Javatropolis with Kat and Rhino and talk my shite to the masses.
: : I ran across these words and with that sreading it to the masses idea in mind, I was wondering what you all thought. Any words would be helpful. Thanks.
: : - Big Tim
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: : 'Intertwining'
: : I feel you before me, you're there
: : My hand penetrates the nothingness
: : longs to hold you, feel you, touch you
: : Hopes to forever be with you
: : for eternity and the life that follows
: : Wishing for one moment it can be
: : Dreaming day after night, night after day
: : that what can be, will be
: : and what will be, eternal love
: : Between two souls, intertwining
: : Two bodies, mere physical entities
: : enshrined with the immortal souls
: : created by Him, for us to share
: : To be a part of, always
: : A piece of you, a piece of me
: : a piece of me, a piece of you
: : Two become one and the world fades
: : We are all that exists
: : In our minds, all that matters
: : Two souls, one immortal soul